Wait For Tommorows Sun (Lullaby) Comments

I don't normally say this, but this is too short. The writer never has the ability with this short a poem to draw the audience in. There are other ways to draw them in but those are harder. I would suggest four verses on this thing and try to make each verse a whole thought unto itself. With the same ending line, of course. GW62

awe how sweet. im sure yur baby will fall right asleep. jus don't think of having any anytime soon! lolz. but your baby will be very lucky 2 have a mother like you. and will always remember that lullaby. especially with that great voice of yours. this is really good!