Vitruvian Sin Comments

i liked it. it shows such passion and integreity. you'll become a famous writer one of these days, keep up the good work.

Wow Ananda......... Such a nice word painting, I really enjoyed. Keep it up.With Love, Kolitha

Are you sure you never wrote before? You're good, girl. And I'm glad you discovered your gift. I was enthrawled in this one. I couln't stop reading and I just had to get to the end. I sort of got the feeling that the character was dancing between fantasy and reality....what she wanted to be versus what really was. Was I wrong on that? Anyway, great write.

There is a lovely sense of play and good humour in this poem - your beloved's nose seems to come to the rescue, when you are about to drown in his eyes! In fact the poem's strength is the way it dances between two poles, between keen observation and surrender. I love it. Thank you - John.

Some people don't need a pencil to draw a picture...Imaginative writing.

I'm with Jerry on this. There are signs of maturity beyond your claimed 23 years in this and the english is very impressive with the exception of a couple of small slips which may simply be typos.. And yeah, I wonder who you might be too - that's the problem with this site: so many pseudonyms in use that it's easy to lose track of who's who. Are you me? Are you from eastern Europe even? Are you the personification of my poemhunter paranoia? Whatever, this has a lot of strong qualities - like Leonardo's drawing - and holds the reader's attention very effectively from beginning to end, with the first dozen lines or so in particular standing out. The number of comments you've amassed here already show that this has been a success for you. This style seems to suit you very well and would be worth developing. Well done again. The very best to you. xx jim. PS Good title!

Wow! ! Very passionate and moving! ! Thanks for sharing! ! Always, Nick

Extremely sensual, and perfectly detail oriented. Sounds like God's gift to women.... :) I enjoyed realing it - well done!

I'm not going to lie. That was THE best love poem I have ever read. The way you describe the person is soothing and it would make you day dream but then you couldn't read the rest! I loved this poem! That was very much worth my time and should be to anyone else. Wonderful ! ! {+} Simon Cowell might even say he loved it but you know how hard he is to please. Loved It!

Ananda! this is incredible. oh my god. I can't begin to tell you how I felt while reading this. you have a beautiful way with words. and such feeling. I read someone commented on this one saying 'you could go deeper.' i don't agree. your style is simple, deep, and leaves so much to the imagination. keep your style and NEVER sell out. again this was moving in more ways then one. truly breath taking. M to F

Ananda, Notwithstanding the praise above (which is well deserved) you can go further. There is a lot of narrative in the poem, which keeps it grounded, almost like a film noire. Push the language further, go on, because I know you can!

The perfect body, pure with out flaws, no corruption saith she, The man all women through the ages, still wish to see. Very Nice.

Very well done willout the details...your words paint the picture

That was very good, i been a deep person in my life also.been through lifestorm's it seem now im a surviver.that why im writing poem now, i got alot of storyteeling to tell.have a bless day.

Wow! ! What an incredible body! ! What an awesome poem! ! Very spicey! ! Hugs, Dee

Ananda, I enjoyed your nice and detailed description. Hopefully, this comes from personal experience. Well, I'm jealous, what can I say? Keep up the good work! CeCe

that really so deep and beautiful as jerry said.. you are so deep person.. your feelings are so great and your thinking is a stunning.. you are so creative person.. keep the work up... yours hazem