Virus. Comments

Now now, KayLuh, with that Idea, if you nixed the rhyme scheme to display what was completely in your heart, it would be much better. Come on, you dont need lines like Like a child who loves candy canes. you could be a lot more serious about the whole matter, that is an aweful way to describe love. A child just wants the sugar of a candy cane and doesn't want to pay for it. A candy cane is a highly ephemeral analogy, and if you studied a virus and actually created semi-intellegent analogies, this poem could be very nice. I suppose for effort I will give you an 8.