Virtual World Comments

I admit my poetry is attroccious and I apoligizee for feeding u with verbal diarrahea. I neeed 2 get gud.

This poem is awful. It makes literally no sense. Do you even know how to construct grammatically correct sentences? From time immemorial? The six exclamation marks at the end aren't really necessary either. GET GOOD PLEASE.

Poem is bad. Maked no sense. Get good plz.

What a nice poem is it! Nice words have been used in the poem. The quality of the poem is in its flow, the texture of the poem is knitted well, the theme is fantastic, a very good image has been created.The another quality of the poem is its mystic music. It is a great poem.I like the poem; I enjoyed it while reading too. I am giving you 100/100..Keep it up. And at last I like to thank you for sharing this superb poem among us.

ok i will edit it! ! ! i can get your point! !

Confucius said: it is better to light one candle than to curse the darkness. if it is used in Promethean n philanthropic sense the word lighting is preferable, i think...

Thank you! ! ! ! ! and i get your point ma'am! ! but can the word 'lighting' be used here? ? ?

Promethean as well as human...but is it really burning or lighting? it's a beautiful poem

Sir; a candle can't burn indefinitely; likewise i can't be in this dream desired world indefinitely; therefore i am happy to burn here; somewhere i am solicited that people seeks light from my light; it's a pain of another type; a pain i cherish.......and i'm burning with flames of nostalgia............

At the symbolic time of 10 past 5, you have lost someone close to you. But now in the same time, you are with burning flames(?) and why the world seeks relief from your pain? The world of dreams within you has become a reality to you and in which you roam. If light is thrown upon the something hidden, with ease the readers can comprehend the poem. Lines spun around a time factor is something new. A very good poem.

managing to express the virtual world with realism..that's really a great talent.. Let the Sun take a rest Burning inside from time immemorial; My heart melting like wax My world of dreams turns into smokes; It was 10 past 5 once I saw the first glimpse of Sunlight; Beautiful lines.. keep writing! ! !

Great! :) A perfect write!

This poem is really deep, I really like it though. It has a dark essence, I can feel the pain between the words and lines. Very good.

greatly written i like it well done :)