Virginity At Stake Comments

it is bad in this society when you have to give up your virginity to try to get an education which you truly deserve, and your cries are never heard.

This is a different approach to poetry that seems to be working for you. However, a less rigid structure would be more convincing and relatable when conveying a shattered mind.

I'm a little confused of this story...maybe I could to acknowledge such decision if it would be inevitable for solving the life of somebody dear....but such reason like 'carrier' or ' to be fully secured' it is slushy.... it is for me way toward 'business with own body'....it is so sad when commercialism touches the feeling of life of somebody....