Verbs Simile And Metaphor Comments

For me, a philologue-grammarian, it is an apocalypse, I wonder at the perception.How beautifully it succeeded to pepict the transitions a human being is going through.

There is nothing like grammar-transitive and intransitive verbs, subject, object, simile, metaphor- to give illumination about life's possibilities and the unlimited powers of the individual person. The last three lines bring sad closure and the complete passive mood. Masterful.

WOW...I am very impressed by your poem Barry. What a unique way of looking at oneself through similes and metaphors.10+++ and into my favorites :)

all the writing i've done, never thought to personalize, personify the tenses as periods of time. So effective, so well done. Thanks..