Sunday, March 2, 2008

Verbal Algebra Comments

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A beggar's tired voice
Rings out seeking pity

His cup rattles constantly
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Barbara Attaway
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Michael Pruchnicki 02 March 2008

Nice work, Barbara! Leave a little for your readers to interpret and specify with concrete images. We can assume 'disjointed public's coin alms, ' so why not provide an image of one uncaring member of that disjointed public? Perhaps a harried housewife on her way to the grocery or a worried shopkeeper mentally juggling account books as he hurries to work?

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Barbara Attaway

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Beaumont, Texas, USA
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