Eight years before walked
On the sun's chest; Earth's
Twin, the Morning Star.
And then you went back
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walk on the chest of the fire ball itself unimaginable and go into it and hurt it further is something not appealing, though the scene is such a beautiful sight! When it is documented in the poetical form, the flaws should be avoided..
I love your celestial theme, drawn together and personified cleverly. Excellent poem!
Yeah that phenomenon really excited me too...Bruise in his heart when a dot covered a shiny sun bright background and it made all people stand for few minutes to watch this rare days...well at least i can watch it in net or youtube hahahaha....it's a good documentation of a phenomenon in a poetry_Unwritten Soul
Has a nice philosophical/fable feel, with a touch of scientific romanticism! Well done! The last words are really powerful for some reason to me...
Nilakshi Nath, Are you joking? 'Leaving a bruise in his Heart; ' That's the reason people, sometimes, laugh at the poets like us for writing something totally not true....
Hello, It's a very imaginative poem. Excellent work! !