Wednesday, June 6, 2012

Venus Walked On The Sun's Chest Comments

Rating: 4.5

Eight years before walked
On the sun's chest; Earth's
Twin, the Morning Star.
And then you went back
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Neela Nath Das
COMMENTS
Devanshi Shah 22 June 2012

Hello, It's a very imaginative poem. Excellent work! !

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Veeraiyah Subbulakshmi 14 June 2012

walk on the chest of the fire ball itself unimaginable and go into it and hurt it further is something not appealing, though the scene is such a beautiful sight! When it is documented in the poetical form, the flaws should be avoided..

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Vincent Kuo 10 June 2012

I love your celestial theme, drawn together and personified cleverly. Excellent poem!

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Unwritten Soul 09 June 2012

Yeah that phenomenon really excited me too...Bruise in his heart when a dot covered a shiny sun bright background and it made all people stand for few minutes to watch this rare days...well at least i can watch it in net or youtube hahahaha....it's a good documentation of a phenomenon in a poetry_Unwritten Soul

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James Merchant 09 June 2012

Has a nice philosophical/fable feel, with a touch of scientific romanticism! Well done! The last words are really powerful for some reason to me...

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Veeraiyah Subbulakshmi 07 June 2012

Nilakshi Nath, Are you joking? 'Leaving a bruise in his Heart; ' That's the reason people, sometimes, laugh at the poets like us for writing something totally not true....

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Monoj Panday 06 June 2012

so nice ur expression, I like ur poem

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