Tuesday, March 9, 2010

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frozen lips
in the dancing snow,
wilted flowers fall.
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Amazing! Loved the read. Well done!

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Preetam Shetty 14 May 2010

Good one! ! ! ! your poems sing

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Afzal Shauq 07 May 2010

Frozen lips- in the dancing snow, Like wilted flowers fall. Operatic echoes- embrace the cold air, Softly sings my name. Ice crystals- shattered my fair skin, I'm pulverized in the wind. My ashes seek warmth, To live, to survive... I am reading this poem again because this is one of your very sweet and some how master piece one..I really read it few time and each time I enjoyed t much..lovely dea with lovely expression of words...well done...thanks for your comments too

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Gwen Halbach 30 April 2010

Very good, Brenda. I too liked that first stanza. Please take time to read my: I Cannot Return. That is my account of life in the Far North of Canada. Adeline

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Kudakwashe Roak Mutama 22 April 2010

short and sweet! ! ! ! i liked this stanza here 'Frozen lips- In the dancing snow, Like wilted flowers fall.' keep writing...

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Afzal Shauq 12 April 2010

rich idea and well expressed..really liked it very much

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John Knight 07 April 2010

Hello Brenda - To experience your first snow - WOW - I'm glad it stirred the muse. This is a very gentle flowing poem. V 1 What a contrast - dancing snow and frozen lips. V 2 Arias from the Snow Maiden echoing Breeeeeeeeendaaaaaaaaa across the valley. V 3 Wind and ice crystals - personal pulverisation. V 4 Echoes of the final lines of another perfect poem 'We stay inside near the fire - to cuddle and warm each other'. Even snow has its compensations Brenda - Snowwoman, Thanks for sharing your experience - I was three months old when I saw my first snow - but I was not allowed to make a Snow Angel. love through Poetry - JOHN.

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John Knight 07 April 2010

Hello Brenda - Lovely experience to touch your first snow - WOW - so glad it stirred the muse. This is a very gentle poem with a lovely rhythm. V 1 What a contrast - the snow dances while the lips freeze. V 2 Arias of the 'Snow Maiden' The cold air seems to whisper Breeeeendaaaaaaaaa V 3 We can only stand it for so long - Ice crystals in the wind - winging and stinging V 4 To borrow lines form another perfect poem 'We stay inside near the fire - to cuddle and warm each other'. Even snow has its compensations! ! ! Thanks for sharing your 'Snowwoman' experience. Love in Poetry - JOHN.

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nicely written..a different style always pleases me. keep writing. after reading your bio, i'm sure you can write much more better if you don't stop. Best wishes n God bless ya..

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I'm me 16 March 2010

eerily cold, haunting yet elegant, pungent yet beautiful, sombre yet has a strange vim. Great poem!

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Siddharth Singh 15 March 2010

The freezing picture painted by you is superb, While your ashes seek warmth to survive. Amazing!

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Siddharth Singh 15 March 2010

The freezing picture painted by you is lovely, while your ashes seek warmth to survive.

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Dr.subhendu Kar 09 March 2010

My ashes seek warmth, To live, to survive.....................excellent write by imagery, i simply i lovr it

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