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Shallow we wade through unclean water.
Quiet is the current that carries us on.
Newfound truth washes away a muddy past.
We are prisoners of the 'ideal' society.
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When I read this, the last word, 'wave' seems to rhyme, but with what? quite a lyrical conclusion. Likewise on the metaphor of water, very imaginative; unclear, dragging, resisting, suffocating... but nonetheless changeable. nice writing :)
When I read this, the last word, 'wave' seems to rhyme, but with what? quite a lyrical conclusion. Likewise on the metaphor of water, very imaginative; unclear, dragging, resisting, suffocating... but nonetheless changeable. nice writing :)
This is a really interesting poem, I love the way you've used the extended metaphor of the water, and how you have related it to concepts of drowning and of change. Very enjoyable to read.
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7/28/2025 3:36:00 AM # 1.0.0
When I read this, the last word, 'wave' seems to rhyme, but with what? quite a lyrical conclusion. Likewise on the metaphor of water, very imaginative; unclear, dragging, resisting, suffocating... but nonetheless changeable. nice writing :)