Untitled As Of Yet (Any Suggestions) Comments

Vaun, someone did you a great disservice by voting your poem so low. This poem is lovely but needs some work. I would not leave in the line, 'Where are you, my darling? ' Let the reader feel the loneliness and longing by the words you use. I love the thought that this is a dream within a dream and perhaps it is a good title. You will know after you have worked a bit on it. Check it again for typos and spelling. Your images are haunting and beautiful. You should be proud of it...but it isn't quite finished, in my opinion. Raynette