Monday, June 8, 2009

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There's a burried truth beneath all the lies,
That fiction it blinds me as it stirs and unties.

Forward I go, but I still hold back,
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Nashy Lamen
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Danzen D. 02 July 2009

I agree with all of them. You DO have the potential of becoming an excellent poet (not to mention you are one, hehe) . If this were 20 pages, with big fonts, I would be frustrated at the time I waste in turning a page. Hmm..it really is true..that as you grow older, you learn more..and you become wiser. I know you've become wiser, and I believe you'll know how to deal with things next time, heh heh. (Yes, there'll be a next time) . Smile!

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Sulaiman Mohd Yusof 14 June 2009

Its a kind of enigma and you keep on believing someone will soon shower you with happiness and love.I love the rhyming scheme of this poem.Well done Nat!

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Michael Kersting 11 June 2009

Well Done, Natasha, You have the potential of becoming an excellent poet.

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Eyan Desir 11 June 2009

Good write I think you spelt when wehn wrong please fix it

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Chanyn Fuller 11 June 2009

this is amazing. a true work of genious

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