(untitled- 01.07.05) [part Of Me] Comments

I gave you a 7 because I believe the emotion is real, I felt the exact same one myself recently. I didn't rate you higher because you're not being honest with yourself.. i.e. you're not being honest in your poetry and thus you're not being honest with me, the reader. You candy coated it, don't. You're pulling punches when you shouldn't. There's an anger I can feel festering between everyone of these lines, you're not letting it out. It's an anger that makes for pure, raw, untainted real emotional passion that poetry thrives on... Good luck.