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Jacob, this poem is fantastic. There are a couple of typos here and there (give it a quick glance over - you'll find them easily enough) . I remember workshopping this with you many moons ago at ye olde Corks wine & bar and I am impressed with the changes you have made (I think you shortened the last stanza? And probably a couple of other things?) . There are a number of very strong lines here: building the future that checks are addressed to and Holy un-manufactured rays from tall windows paint saints / across pursed faces who choke down another sermon / that won't lick their bill's envelopes are a couple of my favorites. Keep it up, brother! You are getting better and better at this whole poetry exercise. Like a fine wine, Jacob, a very very fine wine.

Very very good, captures so much, profound.