Two Hearts Comments
Two hearts
I waited for you dear,
for you to come near.
I waited for you long,
...
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Beautiful poetry. Love is not just two hearts getting to know each other, it is they share the happiness, the pain of one another. Very fluent rhyming words, bringing forth the true mood of the poem. Good. And thank you for sharing. Do keep writing. One suggestion: 04th line in the second stanza could be corrected as: but don't know what for I long. It makes the line grammatically correct on one part. It give the correct meter to the line too. Pl forgive me if I am trying to correct an English professor!
I like this, especially these lines: Weakened is your heart, burdened with your sorrow. Could you lend me some if I would like to borrow? What a great thought, borrowing someone else's sorrow in order to lessen his or her burden.
Two hearts defines the true love where Pain and joy both the feelings are entangled... Truly awesome feelings expressed in ur beautiful poem by ur beautiful heart..
A beautiful words & wounderfull this poem shows the true love of two hearts romantically. Thanks for sharing keep writing
Very nice poem. But sad to say, not all hearts are open enough...
Dear Jasbir... thank you for liking my poem. and i do agree with you that not all hearts are open but there are always positive things for us we just need to take a step towards that positively. thank you again
Sensational job. Yes you did exemplied how two heart's connect. Well done and congrats for this poem being chosen as 'poem of the day. Well deserved.
my sorrows may lessen your cheer that is what I fear.- - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - an interesting dilemma, how do we get close to another soul if we don't share our sadnesses as well as our joys
Thank you Susan...You are right that everyone needs to share their joys as well as sorrows and i wanted to show that sharing and caring brings hearts near.
I have already commented on this great poem, but le me congratulate M. Uzefa Rashida for this poem being selected as members poem of the day, a well deserved selection.
I waited for you dear! Thanks for sharing; and, having your poem as, poem of the day. My own appeared on the 8th of this month.
Superb poem on longing. You did a wonderful job by narrating the nitty-gritty of two hearts eager to meet with so many questions in mind and desperation to feel the other, Thanks for sharing and a full 10, Also congrats for the PH Poetry of the day
Thank you Asimji for your encouraging words and your all comments are full of zest and real enthusiasm. I wait for your comments. Thank You once again.
Knock knock.... Is anyone there, make some space for me too in your heart :) Lovely poem. a little trust, a little coaxing will break the ice and nothing in this world can stop two hearts from becoming one. beautiful poem.10
A beautiful painting of two hearts in love but refraining in striping with each other. A difficult moment but once this moment is passed and window is opened in the hearts, fresh air of true love comes in the room and suffocation is gone. Life starts smiling.
A beautiful picture of true love. True love is the merging of two hearts. You have beautifully depicted the shades n colors of true love.
thank you for your kind encouraging words. it means a lot to me.
A true submission to the beloved one... A soulfu soulful write that can never be denied.
Thank You Sir for reading my work and giving your precious opinion about it.
thank you Sir for reading my poem and giving your precious opinion about my work.
A beautiful and an expressive write. Welcome to the poetry site.
Love! True love; forever being yours. Thanks for sharing.
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You have an incredible mind, Yue. Such beautiful work..! ! :) love it