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Tsunami Comments

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No tale that tells of the innocents' death
Should be spoken in other than faint whispers.
Of unblemished porcelain figurines in school shorts
And quaint little jackets with embroidered blazons
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Rod M.Peters
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Bri Edwards 21 October 2017

bla·zon ˈblāz(ə) n/ verb 3rd person present: blazons 1. display prominently or vividly. they saw their company name blazoned all over the media synonyms: display, exhibit, present, spread, emblazon, plaster; More announce, proclaim their name is blazoned across the sails report (news) , especially in a sensational manner. accounts of their ordeal blazoned to the entire nation synonyms: display, exhibit, present, spread, emblazon, plaster; More announce, proclaim their name is blazoned across the sails 2. Heraldry describe or depict (armorial bearings) in a correct heraldic manner. inscribe or paint (an object) with arms or a name. nounHeraldry plural noun: blazons 1. a correct description of armorial bearings. archaic a coat of arms. - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - No tale that tells of the innocent's death................probably meant to be innocents' I put is instead of his in one of my recent poems till someone told me about it! - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - Hope hangs by a thread..............not only true, no doubt, but a nice alliteration as well! favorite stanza so far, nicely executed: A tale that will tell Of the voice of the shy little boy crying ‘Run to the wooded hill, a wave is coming', Being smothered by the loud yells of the schoolmaster Urging the children to walk single file Along the water's edge to the town hall, Is best told in the faintest undertone, - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - and the last stanza is also 'priceless'. what sort of 'justice', i wonder, were parents seeking. hmm? thanks for the Poet's Notes! to MyPoemList. bri :) it seems i saw some video of the tsunami rolling into a town back then, carrying some buildings and vehicles with it, i think. Nature unleashed!

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Rod Mendieta 22 October 2017

Great comments as always. I thought it could have gone both ways: 'innocent's death' or 'innocents' death'. I somehow favoured the singular in this case but on second thought, I may change it to plural. And 'blazons', yes, a bit archaic, perhaps 'embroidered badges' would have been better, though I have this strange preference for archaic expressions, no doubt reflecting my somewhat peculiar hatred of the 'modern' and passionate love for anything that's outdated, outmoded, etc. Did I mention that my personal hymn could very well be Living in the Past?

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Barry Stebbings 28 August 2017

Very thoughtful, Rod. A difficult subject well written.Your understated response to violent tragedy is very powerful.

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Rod Mendieta 28 August 2017

Thank you Barry, I may change a couple of things but I'm glad you feel it has some merits even in the present form.

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