Saturday, December 7, 2013

True Love Is An Old Lie Comments

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True love is an old lie
Long passed down and is yet to die
Told round fires to children of a young age
So they may hunger for marriage.
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Kareem Ayodejih Abeeb
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Brian Johnston 08 December 2013

Like your poem. Sorry for your disappointment and pain. We all feel it. My consolation is that I can create True Love within myself for others. Other's can still want more and be disappointed but that is their problem. Perhaps they are lucky I can't give them what they think they want. Keep writing! The rhythm of this poem could be improved and would make it even stronger. True love is an old old lie, Long passed down and yet to die...

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Rowdy Solomon 07 December 2013

Vivid description of someone who has truly been hurt before. I am blow away.

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