Torement Comments
Leeching on sympathetic wrists,
squirming at the smell of iron tinged blood,
pen dripping while wrists fill the barrel.
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Your poetry is very darkly emotional. Very well done. But I do find the occasional misspelling a little jarring. Remain all 'too' real, Last line, 'They're' both the same. Is 'Torement' misspelled for a reason? I might see that. Otherwise, it's torment. Iron-tinged might be better with a hyphen. Don't take this as a criticism, just a comment. Otherwise, I find it a very well expressed.
Despair, poetically expressed. The blood, the words, Blades upon flesh. At the same time imagination, worry, fear and the horror effect are affecting the reader.
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8/2/2025 6:53:20 AM # 1.0.0
Your poetry is very darkly emotional. Very well done. But I do find the occasional misspelling a little jarring. Remain all 'too' real, Last line, 'They're' both the same. Is 'Torement' misspelled for a reason? I might see that. Otherwise, it's torment. Iron-tinged might be better with a hyphen. Don't take this as a criticism, just a comment. Otherwise, I find it a very well expressed.