Top Of The World: New York Comments

You share a wealth of information in this effusive description of New York and the first few lines are very well penned. I think though some of the poem could be cut, particularly those lines in which you have used rhyme for rhyme's sake rather than as a device to enhance the description. 'Willingly fulfilled aggressive demands to live by' is an example of a rather clumsily constructed rhyme, as is 'Blazing trail for other Garden of Eden’s to tower.' Sometimes it is preferable to cut a few lines rather than pad out the poem with indifferent rhyming and/or poor meter. Your second stanza is much better than the first and would stand alone rather well, I do believe. Love, Allie ♥ ♥ ♥ ♥

Cities are cities the hub of trade. Though New York does a flavor of it's own. From the Dutch colony to today.

Though this is a very well written and expressed poem about New York City, M. A., I personally am not a fan of that city, coming myself from the deep Southern part of New Jersey, about 100 miles or so from that foreign city. It is unique, I will grant that, but who would want to live there? A thousand or more people on it's streets will walk by body, alive or dead, lying on the side walk without the courtesy of trying to help or calling a cop. All NYC does is represent the worst of what this fine country is, despite it's grand facade. Still, your poem is a very good one, lauding what O. Henry once called the Soddom and Gomorrah of the world. Carl.

an excellent write. a ten

You describe the essence of New York so well. It is vibrant and exciting and you did a great job with your poem. A '10! ' Best Wishes, Marilyn

new york is a fantastic place you tell it so well 10

Madam you chose the topic of my favorite city. Anyone who glorifies its virtues is a friend of mine, I don't care if you're 89 or 99.

Yes indeed New York is the capital of the world most rich and powerful....nice write

True - one rich city