Wednesday, February 10, 2016

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Too many people have died in war and war zones yet from the past we never learn it seems that way
In every war the winner seems a loser in loss of lives the price is huge to pay
'Thou Shalt Not Kill' is Moses Fifth Commandment though such the warlords happily disobey
Young men sacrifice their lives for ageing despots some never learn from the past sad to say
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Mike Smith 10 February 2016

An interesting poem, and one which I don't think you'll find many people who disagree with the message. I had to read it twice over to find all the rhymes. Maybe throw some punctuation in there to separate one rhyme from the next. Aside from that, well done

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