Togetherness Comments

Your words are very thoughtful and carry a prayer.God Bless you both.Love Duncan

You have a poetic form that carries the poem forward, but I don't think you had to risk much of yourself to write this poem. The real poetry is in the pain, in the struggle to make togetherness happen in a time when it is so difficult. If you want to be a better poet, aim for the pain, not the pleasant solution. We put poems out here hoping for positive responses, and others may love this, and I like to get a good response to bathe my ego in acceptance, but I would also like to be useful. I hope you don't take this the wrong way. That's my two cents.