Friday, August 24, 2012

Today Was My Birthday Comments

Rating: 5.0

The table was set with the sweets and the trinkets
The one they came to meet was laid in a blanket
Of all their kisses and the hugs
And all their pinches and the tugs
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Francisca Darko
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Sandy Player 19 January 2013

The title speaks the tune of the poem where you show how short these times are. A present tense time indicator with a preterite verb: nice. The poem has the quality of being written at the end of the day, if you get me; it just seems like it has been. Well done if you wrote it at 11: 58 and didnt edit it. If not, ah well; its still impressive.

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Elena Sandu 17 September 2012

So glad you marked your 14th birthday with this wonderful written poem! Happiness flows, I could be there to have a bite of chocolate, thank you for sharing this with us! I know it's a bit late, please let me sing to you Happy Birthday again and send as an imaginary gift, a box filled with magic candies made of best luck to help you past each test of coming life!

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S.zaynab Kamoonpuri 11 September 2012

Wow a day to remembr how u can pen about it in such a super cool poetic way. Hapy b'day young poetess :)

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Allemagne Roßmann 06 September 2012

A memoir perhaps adding more years to the space allotted that i tell you many happy returns of the day...Spectacular write

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Alon Dy 01 September 2012

Very amazing poem! you have a talent. keep it up! I truly admire your poem!

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