Thursday, July 23, 2009

Today Comments

Rating: 5.0

Today as I stand soaked in the rain,
I feel each dropp washes away all the pain.
I coax my heart to grow back again,
And not let my turmoil go in vain.
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Tiya Sen
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Ted M 24 July 2009

Lovely poem on life. Picking up the pieces, 'As my smile, again, has begun to reach up to my eye. ' Great presentation, nice rhyme. Would be more eye-catching if split into 3 stanzas starting with ' Today' - related to 3 phases. Drop with a single p would also be pleasing. Best wishes.10+++

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