Monday, January 29, 2007

To The Tree Hugger In Times Square Comments

Rating: 5.0

The rain falls and David will not win today
While his sign screams “Save the Trees”
And everywhere the world is go, go, go
And the sky is rain, rain, rain
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Ben Partenay
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Cecil (cj) Krieger 05 February 2007

An amazing visual write… excellent prose… a 10!

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Ivan Donn Carswell 31 January 2007

An intriguing thought, 'Save the countless people', but there is no way to save a dual race to extinction. It is just a matter of who'll get there first... Powerfully expressive poem Ben. Congratulations - but keep out Times Square, the traffic pollution will get to you if the crush of pre-occupation doesn't first! Rgds, Ivan

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jim hogg 30 January 2007

The human ocean that may drown itself. Terrific poetry. Great image development to create an atmosphere of futility. Impressive writing throughout.

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