To Tams Comments

Hallo Ashley, you wanted me to look at your work, so here I am. I think you write well and enjoyed this. It might be a good idea to work on the layout, make the phrases shorter, as I looks like a piece of prose, not so poetic.Try to present the ideas in blocks, right through with two, three or four lines, even free verse (I think) needs a structure. Avoid phrases like bitter sweet that have often been used and check colnel, I think you spell it Colonel. You have talent, there is lots to like here, Leslie.

To someone I loved and cherished

To someone I loved and cherished deeply.