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The flow on this is still jagged and stale. It has good ideas and a good concept. This poem needs to be edited and reedited again the form is just not strong at all.

This one has a got a good flow to it - quite a pleasure to read. And i love the last line - 'Can you see me now? '.. i don't know why, but I always love endings like that. Simple, yet really effective (for me anyway) . 10.

a remarkable verses with great message....nice....10

I agree it's a nice subliminial piece... I travel around reciting I wonder if you do that in Canada. It teaches you alot if you read your work to an audience and socialise with other poets.

A nice interesting piece...Great flow of words! ! ! Thanks............

Not bad! Shorter poem will be better for all to enjoy your sermon!

A great subliminal message. I love it. Great job.

You are very ambitious... that's how it seems to me. Good luck.