To My Unborn Comments

A very thought provoking... nice and powerful writing..............

Very nice! deep and somewhat melancholy

wow i have never cogitated like this before Kelvin.now i am thinkin what would i say to my unknown child if i had one? maybe the same as you ve said here in this marvelous poem.LIVE FOR LOVE AND LOVE FOR LIFE, your unseen child must do great in his/her life with these advices. Mercy ~nb

A fascinating thought, and your poem contains much wisdom and good advice.

Beautiful one, dear Kelvin. Are you a father, expecting of the birth of a child? Congratulations. The content is great and the language is beautiful. I think you may need to spend time to have even lenght of lines. This has been my struggle too. There is that tendency to think freely and write freely. That is also very much acceptable in poetry. But at times, when we move forward in poetry writing, we can also demand more from ourselves to create a structure with harmony.