Tuesday, April 1, 2014

To Bosom Thee.....I'Ll Rise..... Comments

Rating: 5.0

He was before his beloved,
Kneeling on his thighs……..
His shoulders were down,
With his soulful cries…….
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Yash Shinde
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Carl Roussell 05 October 2022

A wonderful poem.

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True love says "till death doth us part"… beautiful story poem.

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Leon Moon 02 May 2022

The most captivating aspect of this was the focal point stanza which had "If you wash the shore like a restless sea... and cut through boulders to reach their source' -- as this both tied 'sctructurely' as well as lyrically the surreal, 'beyond-yet-real' nature of love

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Dr Dillip K Swain 13 February 2022

Simply I can say, this is a beautiful poem.....just beautiful.5 stars! !

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This is one of the best love poems I have ever read! Love it! A ten..

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Khairul Ahsan 23 August 2018

An excellent poem. Loved it.

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Uma Ram 11 May 2015

Too good. Loved reading it son. Blessings...thanks for the beautiful verses

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Kelly Kurt 02 April 2015

A beautiful poem, Yash. Thank you for sharing.

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Geetha Jayakumar 21 June 2014

Fantastic poem Yash. Your poem is filled with many captivating lines..... Mortals do vanish, true love never dies…Very true said. A true masterpiece, I can tell. Flow of poem is smooth and captivating from beginning till end. Just loved reading it.

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Akhtar Jawad 31 May 2014

Imagining a mistress as a restless sea is a nice idea. We cannot conquer death. So we must have something to soothe our sorrowful emotions at the death of A loved one. A lovely poem.

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Tadasha Tripathy 30 May 2014

Awesome! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! Dear brother I liked your way of expression. Thanks.

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Lawerence Mize 27 May 2014

Beautifully written poem. Enjoyed it very much.

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Juan Olivarez 26 May 2014

Beautiful poem. Very, very much like the work of the great master Edgar Alan Poe. Indeed a masterpiece. Though one flaw you should correct. One does not kneel on thighs. One kneels on knees. If you can adjust that without compromising your rhyme it will be perfect. Blessings.

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Loyd C Taylor Sr 26 May 2014

Hello poet Yash. This was a very enchanting story and wonderful poem, I did so enjoy. Loyd

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Kevin Patrick 19 May 2014

a wonderful epic of pure restless imagination, you sustained my attention the entire time with magnificent story, as someone who does not give in readily to the fairy-tale aspects, your language and wording was well put, a great talent for one so young.

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Heba Mahmood 19 May 2014

this is indedd AMAZING! ! ! ! shows great passion and devotion.... you seem very talented. Great work man.

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Lorraine Colon 18 May 2014

I truly like the old fashioned delivery of this poem. I find it so pleasing. The music is a wonderful embellishment. It adds greatly to the romance which flows so strongly. It's as though Shakespeare himself took up residence in your mind for the writing of this poem. Afterward, he departed with a broad smile, satisfied he had found a worthy apprentice. Congratulations on a poem beautifully done!

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Shahzia Batool 15 May 2014

it proves you a gifted poet...again the same point, no need of punctuation, the slant present in your writing is enough to narrate the story! ! !

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Suresh (n) Abraham 11 May 2014

excellent poem. Excellent writing with a smooth flow

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Wahab Abdul 08 May 2014

how should i react i am speechless.....quite an excellent poem with many reasons...let not mention the reasons now. i love it.

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Yash Shinde

Yash Shinde

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