Time Is A Series Of Boxes Comments

Not madness, no. Despondency, perhaps. Feeling closed in, in, in. Thank you, thank you for submitting more poems (both appealing) . This one, I think, is one of your best. I would rather you drop the last five lines. Or at least one of them. Maybe conclude I can't breathe I cannot breathe I can't breathe Please help me Please, please I am okay and shouldn't be But, all in all, a very commendable effort. You ought to move toward publication - or have you already? At least keep sharing your work w/ PoemHunter!