Monday, March 10, 2014

Time In, Time Out Comments

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Time in, time out
Through each time I want to shout.
We go as one at the good lord's calling
We call it something like 'free falling'
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Brianna Stuckey
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Khairul Ahsan 19 March 2014

Liked this poem, a bit too long though. ''Time in and time out.' She says, unknowingly her mouth has a mind of it's own' - This is a beautiful line! 'But she feels like he can see past her. His eyes change, full of passion, as if given a shove. She knows that he knows.... He sees she's never had love.' Nice!

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