Friday, December 2, 2005

Time And Love Comments

Rating: 5.0

Love might be nothing less than
Tears subsumed to rain clouds,
Frothing over a desert lake bed –
Let this be a dream.
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Kelly Vinal
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Asma Bahrainwala 06 September 2006

nice write, kelly... regards asma...

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Alison Cassidy 20 August 2006

Amazing read, Kelly. Unusual images and ideas. The last stanza in particular is brilliant and would make a poem on its own. Warmly, Alison

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Jeffrey Spahr-Summers 02 December 2005

I like this Kelly!

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Declan McHenry 02 December 2005

Rivetting work Kelly with some superb images.

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Raynette Eitel 02 December 2005

Kelly, poets through the ages have written about love until the term is nearly trite. Your poem has some new things to say. It is a bit analytical, but perhaps that is what makes it so new. I love 'tears subsumed to rain clouds, frothing over a desert lake bed.' This is lovely imagery. The last stanza is so breathtaking, it could stand alone. Good job. Raynette

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Max Reif 02 December 2005

I felt a release, reading your last verse. That's a kind of Magic! I like the first verse where you introduce the theme. Stanza 4 had, I thought, some good lines. I didn't have as direct an experience reading the middle stanzas. There may be a progression of thought or feeling going on that I didn't pick up on this reading.

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Kelly Vinal

Kelly Vinal

Homestead, Florida
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