Love might be nothing less than
Tears subsumed to rain clouds,
Frothing over a desert lake bed –
Let this be a dream.
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Amazing read, Kelly. Unusual images and ideas. The last stanza in particular is brilliant and would make a poem on its own. Warmly, Alison
Kelly, poets through the ages have written about love until the term is nearly trite. Your poem has some new things to say. It is a bit analytical, but perhaps that is what makes it so new. I love 'tears subsumed to rain clouds, frothing over a desert lake bed.' This is lovely imagery. The last stanza is so breathtaking, it could stand alone. Good job. Raynette
I felt a release, reading your last verse. That's a kind of Magic! I like the first verse where you introduce the theme. Stanza 4 had, I thought, some good lines. I didn't have as direct an experience reading the middle stanzas. There may be a progression of thought or feeling going on that I didn't pick up on this reading.
nice write, kelly... regards asma...