Time And Its Trajectory Comments

No doubt, Time is a trickster So erratic, so volatile Yet so precious and so dear More valuable than all other treasures.....so true and impressive. Yes, time is precious and so dear. It is valuable than all other things. A beautiful poem with lofty theme. It is to my poems list.10

Waqt Karta Hay parvarish barson, Hadsa ekbaek nahin hota. (Time works on it too long, before an accident takes place) Big bang was an accident or planned program, it's a debate. To me it appears a willful program. For us time started with big bag and where was time before it and whether time had a quantum, these are all mysterious. You have made a brave effort to think and wite such a thoughtful poem. Nice.

DOES THIS HAPPEN TO ANYONE ELSE? ? ? i mean............just two days ago i read this poem with the following phrase/partial sentence in it: Turn into a wizened hag then this morning, in a short story entitled Prudence, i read a wizened old hag! ! ! ! ! now, i don't know about YOU, but i have rarely in my life heard or used the word wizened, and rarely the word hag. so doesn't this coincidence seem a bit over the top? . and there have been numerous other incidents of coincidental runnings-across of words, rarely used/heard by me, coming to my attention within a few days span. often the case is that i have used it in a poem or letter and then read it in a magazine, book, or poem shortly afterward. ? ? ? ? ? ? ? ? ? ? ? ? ? ? goofy, if ya ask me. bri :)

Like an unbridled horse, As time gallops away, Thousands get crushed under its hooves And many fall dead! i should hope so! wouldn't it be ridiculous and disasterous, .....ok, i stand corrected: disastrous says google...........given the world's present state.........if time did not TAKE millions? every day from this earth? ? ! do ticks leap? fleas do. :) :) well, maybe they DO TOO. - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - as for these lines (some of my favorites) : Time is something we cannot rewind Nor be purchased with money or muscle .................how true. but, then again, in a way one CAN purchase time by relegating tasks to others which otherwise would have to be done by the one with money or muscle. i know it's not EXACTLY the same as what you mean, Valsa. :) - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - my time is almost up. so i'll just end by saying thanks for sharing. :) bri

Time is like that only, we have to live with it...... lovely description with minute detailing.... very nice. I write some few lines from my poem - Time is a puzzle so unpredictable, like norwester or a swirl. Time comes time goes with it's own will an wish Some times with joy again it gives pain Nobody knows about time's own game .....

Time is the very essence of our lives. We can either use it wisely or foolishly. However we choose to use it we can't regain it. Time used well will not disappoint us. A good write.

Dear Mike Barret, Hmm... I am bowled over by this comment coming from such a veteran poet like you sir! I am greatly obliged....!

Valsa, I simply love your work.....through you, much appreciation and joy is brought to many. I'm thankful to be in the period of time wherein I can enjoy your poetry!

Wow, Another great work! ! ! : D

You have drawn a beautiful trajectory of time. 'Time is the cosmic beat The length of life’s yarn It is the harbinger of change That leaves rude etchings on the face' - I cannot think of a better introduction. 'As time advances, life decreases And seasons pass by us unbidden Time rings the bell for all beginning And it tolls the knell for all parting' - Loved these philosophical musings. I agree with Dinesh Nair that 'the analogy of it to a stallion unbridled is something unique that I have ever read.' The last two lines bring the readers, as like you, back to reality from their introspection.

A lovely detailing of time like a biography of Time. It again kindles the lamp that time is passing by. Very nice, very well crafted one.

Wow Valsa this is a wonderful poem great description of how time sometimes seems to slow down and then speed by a definite ten. Brilliant

Profound and wise description about time.... Time is something we cannot rewind Nor be purchased with money or muscle Never static, though at times may seem still And like a river, it rushes and hurtles into eternity Sometimes mutely whispering, It flows into silent timelessness!

Your poem turns time into a particle which is moving in space traversing a trajectory for ever rising. Beautiful poem. Thank you.

a somber and wise reminder with the last two lines, the icing on the cake!

Oh, thinking of time I have lost count of my time! , , , haha, , wonderful ending to this wonderful poem

never static, and volatile! you have done a difficult job successfully and convincingly by defining such an undefinable entity! i love a line (a dialogue) by Beckett, How Time flies when one has fun! ! !

a v nice write Mam, yes time vanishes and with it our life too decreases...a wonderful note in the start of the year.....

No doubt, Time is a trickster So erratic, so volatile Yet so precious and so dear More valuable than all other treasures- - - - - - - -these lines are the cream of this beautiful poem.Time is atrocious, time is merciful, a great healer of our pain.

Wonderful musing over the trajectory of time and the analogy of it to a stallion unbridled is something unique that I have ever read. Time as the silent spectator has to witness the atrocities of the human race and the swollen images of the world around us. The last two lines add to the charm of the poem with the poet participating in the magical game played by time. Here goes your FIRST 10 for this January submission, Valsa madam..