Saturday, January 1, 2005

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Rating: 5.0

My song of time a soundless hymn
Like weeping rain against the wind
I'll sail along a sea of space
and weave a crown of moonlit lace
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Louise Bizzari
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A true 10 for one of my favorite poetry writer's poems. Take a bow, for I am applauding you for your great writing. I was nine years old when I first started writing poetry. Who, or what was your inspiration for writing such great poems? Edgar A. Poe, inspired me into the types of poetry I write.

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Jean-Francois Denis 29 January 2005

Beautifully written Ms.Bizzari! I don't know if it was your first poem, but that was pretty good for a 13 years old girl. I wrote my first poem at thirteen too. :) I really enjoyed reading your poem. ~JD~

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Louise Bizzari 01 January 2005

Thanks for the 'tho' / 'though'....It was 32 years ago, my classical engine must have stalled at that tender age Miss Zylstra!

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Janet Mary Zylstra 01 January 2005

Good rhythm, good imagery. Try not to abbreviate your words. 'Tho' spoils the classical look of the line. 'Though' would be better.

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