Thursday, October 9, 2008

Through The Busy Lane... Comments

Rating: 4.3

Pacing through the busy lane,
Hauled me, The Sight, purely of anguish...
Muttering in her slumber, there lay,
On the squalid pavement,
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Raihana Abdul Jabbar
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Kee Thampi 10 October 2008

nicely you made it words of fire Hunger-stricken existence... Her sombre eyes...Rendered me an insight... Virtually a century of excruciation... Laid, I, a shilling on her deformed metal plate... And

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C T Heart 09 October 2008

Living in a past pace of life, as accdg to you, a busy lane... it makes heart harden and eyes blind to see others. The choice of ignoring others plight for the main concern only is thier own life to live...penned well here, thanks. a 10.

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Nia Riz 09 October 2008

well written.....and the complicated words make this poem serious....good job!

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Sarwar Chowdhury 09 October 2008

significant observations penned well.........10

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