Thougts Comments

a fabulous description of self mortification. well done. some changes to be considered. viberate - viberated [past tense], hairs- hair [hare has no plural], ought - ought to have done

desperate drowning words of one who desires to escape his past.....but finds the effort too great.

wow it was sad, it was nice.. keep writing! ! ~Hazel G.E

From the Muse of a very good poet

Man's mind always gives out paradoxical thoughts; one of joy and one of sorrow. especially when alone. Your poem well explains the complexities of mind and thought..............10

asif, superb poetry I can hear those echos Left and right Here and there Roamed all around came back to me. ++++++10 regards anju

another wonderfully composed poem from you Asif. you write very well and take the reader with you. the phrases empty thoughts... shattered dreams... etc are used very appropriately here.

Guilt compels us to lethargy then to desolation, the only way to exit from there is to confess and seek forgiveness.

were you depressed when you wrote this? It kind of reminds of a painting called 'The Scream'.Everyone gets days like that.

Somewhat dark but wonderful outburst of emotions. I also love the lines quoted by Poet Kesav.

'On my effort way I’m stuck in the Mud of slimy thoughts' true words there...i liked 10

The imagery of sadness and regret well expressed. Ten for your genuine thoughts. Kind regards, Sandra