Tuesday, September 3, 2013

Thought I Could Comments

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Thought I could belong
To the damp cold, the abyss
With chaotic comfort,
And lack of morality.
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Nikhil Sharad
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Lenny Camacho 04 September 2013

this is a pretty well crafted poem, good work... although I would've used The angel they want me to be/and the devil they think I am, but that is because we think based on others perceptions, especially since this piece refects apathetic feelings or at least that's what I sense... I think that line the angel they want me to be... would make a little more of an impact since it shows apathy

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