'Those Who Watch With Me' Comments
The creator-god was tired
and ready to resign. For eons
he had tried to make the whole
endeavor succeed: To make
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What an amazing work. I'm in awe of your rich imagination. Kudos for writing this meaningful write, though classified as a myth or fantasy but so relevant to human life. A big 10.
Your comment hit the center of the target like a true arrow! What is human is between the animal and the divine. Our humanity is made up of qualities of both creatures. My first draft of this poem did not include the deer: You could say the deer nestled me first and then entered the poem to comfort the god.
'Is it all sliding into the dark backward and abysm of time? Will those who watch with me now slip from my nurturing hands into a vast chaos? ' Beautiful lines... Thanks for sharing. 10 for it.
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8/15/2025 6:08:54 PM # 1.0.0
The narrative of this imaginative write is so captivating and yet seems so real as if i am watching the helpless deity and the female deer sharing grief with him when his beautiful creation sliding back into darkness.
You express the whole poem in your comment, Bharati: SHARING GRIEF is the theme.