Thursday, April 16, 2009

This House Is A Home Comments

Rating: 2.7

Walk in
Open eyes.
See faces
Of loved ones
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lilly mandrell
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Aiden Florence 21 April 2009

It sounded a bit awkward in some parts (perhaps some rhyming may have helped perfectify it, although it isn't necessary) . I like the same pattern you have flowing through each of the stanzas with the last line always beginning with 'of.' Good writing and subject choice.

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Jake Erkens 16 April 2009

you spelled bite, bight..oh well, i make mistakes too. I like this poem anyways, good job.

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