It sounded a bit awkward in some parts (perhaps some rhyming may have helped perfectify it, although it isn't necessary) .
I like the same pattern you have flowing through each of the stanzas with the last line always beginning with 'of.'
Good writing and subject choice.
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It sounded a bit awkward in some parts (perhaps some rhyming may have helped perfectify it, although it isn't necessary) . I like the same pattern you have flowing through each of the stanzas with the last line always beginning with 'of.' Good writing and subject choice.