Friday, January 2, 2015

There She Is...! Comments

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There She Is….!

There I wondered what went wrong with me,
Can things be as cruel as they could ever be!
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Mihir Modi
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Bri Edwards 10 January 2015

a superb creation! both the poem and the relationship! ! some humor, some tenderness, some intelligence, some rhyming (quite good) . and a great photo. it is you two? i suppose. i plan to eventually send a private message [remind me if i don't do it in the next week] about the few suggestions/comments about the 'English', which is overall very very good. again, i commend you on the rhyming! a note of advice/caution. i recently heard from a high school classmate (graduated 1966) who has been married to another high school classmate for almost 50 years. and my sister has been married (happily) for 46 years, BUT i, on the other hand, have married four times and divorced three times (so far!) . of course i probably never felt the same about my 'wives' as you seem to about this girl. SO, perhaps you both have a long future of happiness together to look forward to. i hope so. thanks for sharing this 'work' of LOVE? you didn't use the word love. hmmm? one should not have to use the word. bri :) p.s. my favorite line: but will call me a hippo when I am flashing my flab. ......... very 'cute'! BFF'S = best friends? ? i like how you mostly talk to the readers, but sometimes talk TO HER.

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Neela Nath Das 03 January 2015

My mind is now filled with joy and tear.Such a dude and relation I have never found and perhaps will never hear.Great!

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