The Zonkey And The Grolar Bear Comments
'Please don't eat me, '
Said the Zonkey,
To the Grolar Bear,
'I'm far too rare.
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i got to thinking, after i had made other comments: Steve really made a good point (perhaps not logical, but nonetheless a good point) in these lines, which i have chosen as my favorite ones: I'm far too rare. Just like you, I'm an unusual brew. Even a donkey, Looks at me, A little queerly.....................exactly! bri :)
[continued from last comment, which got away from me prematurely........premature submission! } As i was saying: I have more (less significant?) ideas for tweaking to make YOUR poem more pleasing to ME. Yeah, it IS all about ME! but i won't bother telling you my additional ideas unless you beg me. Let's see........ you are married i believe, so you must know how to BEGGGG! thanks for sharing. bri :) :)
having read the comments, let me say: the poem WOULD have been nice ending with hungry. that would allow 'meat'-eating readers to fantasize about the Zonkey's flavor and texture. BUT taking your whining youngest daughter's suggestion/orders? did bring more poetic-meat to the readers' poetic plates (NOT regency bone china plates, i hope; 3 inches wide? ? a Zonkey eyeball might not even fit on THAT! ; it's an inside joke) . why Grolar, not Golar? just wondering! and it could also be expanded 'backwards'. how about telling us how the Golar (i mean Grolar) and Zonkey got to the point where they were discussing the Zonkey's fate? ? route....... i DO pronounce it like root, but some would pronounce it like rout, causing harm to your rhyming efforts. leave it as is; people must learn to talk like i do! ! ! ! i have more (less significant? ideas for tweaking to make the poem please
Bri it has to be Grolar bear as Grolar bears really exist. They are a Grizzly bear/ Polar bear hybrid. You can guess the Zonkey's parents. When it comes to naming a hybrid animal the dad's species always comes first. Some hybrid names are a bit confusing though eg.Dzo as in my poem 'Don't you know I'm a Dzo (half yak and half cow) , whereas Wholphin (false killer whale/ bottlenose dolphin) and Liger are a bit more sensible.
This is a great fantasy in Lewis Carrol style and rolls off the tongue so easily as if a rhyme meant to be conveyed in song - great entertainment, thank you!
Now extended from....'down the hill'. Thank you Colleen and Sunprincess.
..........truly I wish to read more of this enjoyable write...
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7/19/2025 9:58:40 PM # 1.0.0
A nice story, and it rhymes and flows very nicely. It was fun to read. I was expecting such a different ending. Usually in a story like this, the Bear would still have eaten the Zonkey. It was nice seeing an unexpected happier ending.