The Wholeness Comments

With deeper rage it shraded by being correct. The wholeness broke and surfaced on dewy bed. I am a being with mindless wave length.

Thou wert in my mind as pristine unity, One without second a non dual self, Thou wert in every trying time of my mind, With my breath thou flow and with no mind calm..'''''

With deeper rage it shredded by being correct. The wholeness broke and surfaced on dewy bed.

I am a being with mindless wave length. perfection uprise! the unity demise

With my breath thou flow and with no mind calm. The beauty that lulled my mind thou nourish. It is sober shrine that shoved me incised

Thou wert in my mind as pristine unity, One without second a non dual self,

The line, I am a being with mindless wave length' sounds the best. Nice pic too...Keep writing and editing your poems. They will sound better.