The Unfaithful Husband Comments

I gave this a 7 and I cannot recommend it . I really loved the message . The presentation wasn't bad either . The basic problem was the structure you chose . I don't like to see a change in whatever pattern you start with . The first four lines actually rhymed . The other stanzas were a kind of mixture . It is as if you built two separate kinds of houses and tried to put them together . You really can't do it . But I really liked the idea. Find a way to make the three houses one . GW62