The Ultimate Story Comments

Sitting among the ruins of life I sift my fingers in the sand Gossamer cobwebs hang Sparkling in the sun The shadows seem long The corners look so dark Silence hangs heavy Like velvet curtains of yore A cat crosses me and I remember the one on your lap The rose bush it still blooms Watered with my daily tears No care it seems to have Words are futile and empty I don't need words to speak You just read my mind Sitting in my heart you sing And I silently listen - While Those around call me Mad!

words are not needed if they can't change the story....

Another thought provoking poem full of your wisdom Naseer. Thank you again for sharing your wonderful talent with us. :)

A wise advice but then you assume that we want to write about the deep matters. A great write for those who can benefit!

Very touching keep up the good work

Silent story of a life is the memories only known by the people who made them... Beautiful Naseer

Deeply thought provoking Naseer words are a poor substitute for communication heart to heart

A very moving poem Naseer, beautiful in its content, well written my friend, 10 Lynda xx

Written with great depth, and enjoyable flow.... Very good my friend... Bonnie

Sentiments here are confidently expressed through unfamiliar yet apt imagery and metaphors. Impressive writing.

wow.........it is too good.....effortless. 10

Wow.This poetry really have a deep meaning to it.To write a story without a word in it.Beautifully written!

good job sir.. i like this poem alot..

Lovely poem! Stronge lines... Keep doing your work sir

looks and sounds like a beautiful mosaic.

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wow. i really like the ' words suffocate to death' very interesting. one thing though, after you say don't write a word, i don't feel the! is neccesary. but good job

Naseer, this is overwhemingly moving- raw emotions, pain, stunned with grief, emptiness-telling the ultimate story no words can express.20/10 Regards Mamta

this is extremely good! enjoyed it immensely. thanx. al

Words without writing, speech without speaking. Wonderful.