Monday, April 9, 2018

The Train To Nowhere Comments

Rating: 3.5

The day started evenly
with no one to avail.
As the train was running steady
rattling over every rail.
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Shamim A A Kabir 18 October 2021

The scenery passed by slowly as I sat on the hard wood chair My bones were aching badly but no on seemed to care.--- Fantastic

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Bipasha D 24 April 2018

An excellent poem with wonderful narrative, rhyme, theme and a great title. A huge 10 for this and into my poemlist.

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Rajnish Manga 13 April 2018

This poem evokes the painful images of train journey through the holocaust days in the enemy territory. This is extremely poignant. Thanks.

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Susan Williams 10 April 2018

Part One- An important topic and your poem respected the loss of lives in that horror. I like the progression of the poem- at first I thought it was a train ride- possibly to work.....then hard wooden chair? I stopped reading and puzzled over that... then thought perhaps a third world train..

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Susan Williams 10 April 2018

.Part Two- - hands tied and tethered, feet bare and cold? I paused and dread built up inside me- capture of enemy combatants or.. or the Holocaust... then that last stanza- -how my heart hurt that the poor man thought it would be better at the destination... Excellent write.10+++++++++++ and a spot on y fav list.

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Kumarmani Mahakul 10 April 2018

A heartrendering depiction has been made about holocaust through a train journey. I quote..... Beside me sat another with head bowed to the floor The car was full of strangers I counted ninety four. Beautiful poem. Thanks for sharing.10

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