The Train To Hell Comments

Another beautifully rhymed and presented poem to enjoy. What more is there to say except thank you Valerie. Take care and I wish you well.

It is great. Excellent rhyming and format.

This here I think, is a great dream/nightmare poem! I loved it. and, all I can say is excellent!

An amazing ride, journey and poem!

a suggestion is-to make things real and lifelike-focus on the Possessions. it creates the scene better and mood enhancements are so much easier. It even makes the character develop. talk about fredys gun, or even the train after mentioning the conductor. but it is a very good poem ^^

I love this. I'm scared though because I myself have plucked the wings off flies - - - Yikes! ! (I was only little though)

Thank God that was a dream coz i felt i was in the train too

What a powerful poem Ms Valene Dohren.. I am too there in another train and I hope it not to reach its destination perhaps. The dream haunts and becomes a nightmare! A Good poem indeed!

And then there`s me, O such a crime, I wrote a verse that didn`t rhyme And furthermore, I don`t see fit, The rest of it I should admit I love this poem. Especially this verse, quite amusing.

And then there`s me, O such a crime, I wrote a verse that didn`t rhyme....these are my best lines.....and this is one sad poem....dived right to the core of my heart. I like this very much....great talent...Valerie.

So nice, I like the flow....

ROTFLMAO wonderful Val :)

a brilliant poem from a brilliant poet...a phenomenal write mam just stunning piece want to say more but no matter what i will say it would be less so in one word just....perfect....... and i am pretty sure the life you are living is heaven and you are its angel cause you are sure a angel of poets world..... thank you for sharing love, payal

Oh! Val, this is too much! ! Though it is to Hell, what a jolly ride! ! Enjoyed every line of it! !

Thank God! I love the playfulness of this one-wonderful!

a dreamy dream....Lots of souls were inside that train, and it was going...., i liked to be in that train, i would have exciting moments with other souls, this poem is perfect and nice keep up the good works like this my dear Friend. Ellias.

Wow! Such a suspense you successfully have kept till the end.OMG, I'm happy, it was merely a dream.

I assume the train was an express, no getting off. Good write, Val, on the money.

Really fantastic, great humour, really love it, a fantastic poem.

How good this is Valerie, loved the humour too. I could dream forever, yet this is when it is good to wake up. Thank You