The Title-Less Comments

this is super sad...isthis a true story or you just sitting there writing?

Hi I thought to myself that I would read all your poems in chronological order then pick my favourite and comment on that. I havnt picked my favourite yet because I havnt read them all as my comp is abit funny and opens some pages and not others. However I thought regardless of which is my favourite I HAD to comment on this one as it moved me like only very few other poems have. To be honest it broke my heart! You are amazing and your writing is amazing. I really relate to you. I havnt had the same problems you have described in your poetry but I know what its like to be in so much mental pain and inner turmoil. One question: is english your first language? I noticed you live in india and thought it might be your second language. I only say because you are abit of a dichotomy. Whilst you imagery is second to none and you have a great vocabulary that would match or better someone for whom english is their first language, at times you miss out words like if and it and you switch tenses in the same sentence which is the hardest part of english to learn. I really don't think this holds you back because your passion and narrative is soooooo incredible. I just thought if you wanted to make it grammatically better I would show it to someone who's first language is english, in your environment and get them to explain in more depth the tenses etc. However I don't think this would make the poems soul better because it is perfect, stunning and jam packed with emotion. Its very interesting reading all your poems together because when you do that you can see the intense journey you've been on. From being so lonely and low to the jubilation of being in love and then the break down of that relationship. I feel like you really have taken me on a journey in the 20mins or so than I have been reading your poems. I will look forward to any future poems and definitely come back for more! 10/10

wow. this poem is amazing. i loved every minute i read it. i gave it a ten, for it definitely deserves no less. although i have a question, did the father commit suicide? if so, that is so sad! ! ! ! ! ! u could turn this into a song

I was literally in tears at this poem. I love it. This doesn't flow as well as it could but it's still good. Other than that, amazing. Great, keep writing.

nice good keep on writing

awsome poem: d i like it :)

In life if you give things a chance they let you down but people can lift you up. I can dig it.

dude i'll have to say this is your best piece keep it up but i know u can do better i know u are writing songs nowadays but dont forget your roots{the sad poems} take care bro

hey this is really good i can feel where ur comin 4rm keep writin never stop

that's a really good poem sir. i loved it. it has a lot of meaning to it

It's not bad but I see lack of passion

'No tears in writer's eyes....no tears in readers...' - robert frost. Yes i luv to write poems abt death and all...

this poem really made my tears fall! I wanted to write poem on this topic but never mind.............. i luved yours a lottttttttttttttttttttttttttt! and one question... u luv to die? ;)

love it! ! ! ! ! best poem ever! ! !