Thursday, January 8, 2015

The Teasing Splinter Comments

Rating: 5.0

Dear Splinter, go on teasing me,
How sweet is a friend who likes pleasing me,
I know you just want a smile on my face,
I love your words, it's glace and grace,
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Akhtar Jawad
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Ajay Kumar Adarsh 23 August 2016

a lovely poem for friendship...........10++ very beautiful lines 10+++...... I know you just want a smile on my face, I love your words, it's glace and grace, & Friends can change the color of the sea, I can see your face in a cup of tea, with nice rhyming manner a outstanding poem full of enjoyment, love, naughts, emotions, etc.....

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Bri Edwards 30 May 2015

most interesting lines so far: Friends can change the color of the sea, I can see your face in a cup of tea, ........................ i'm not sure if either of these actions is possible, but you've suggested them in a nice rhyming manner! - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - I love to chase it's a source of delight, As you remain throughout in my weak eye sight, When you turn your head and see me chasing, You look beautiful with your teasing so pleasing! ................ Ah! NOW i see that i have competition for Valsa's affections! ! ! : ( i taught Valsa all she knows about teasing. ha ha. bri :)

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Savita Tyagi 10 January 2015

What a delightful poem. I am wondering if we will here an answer from Valsa's pen. So enjoyable would be the exchange from two of my favorite poets. God bless you Akhtarji. Keep writing!

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Salini Nair 10 January 2015

great dedication to a friend....nice....Ocean that joins us has moving waves, Teasing fairies and the pleasing knaves, Friends can change the color of the sea, I can see your face in a cup of tea,

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Bhargabi Dei Mahakul 09 January 2015

Wonderful friendship poem with nice rhyming. Nice tribute poetess Valsa George. Already she appreciated your words in poem. Honour through words with perfect poem. Imagery and presentation both are nice.

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Valsa George 09 January 2015

Hmm....... What a pleasant surprise! I have been away from home till evening and when I opened the computer, I saw your message.... but was not free to see the poem! Oh, this is just amazing.... What a wonderful tribute to 'poor' me..... I feel honored....! So do you mean to say that hereafter I will be called 'Teasing splinter? ' I enjoyed this poem so much! I feel that poems are at your fingertips... Akhtarji ! ! How unlaboured they flow...... Beautiful diction! Thank you so much!

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Bisma Mirza 09 January 2015

What a brilliant friendship poem... :) ;) friends are life without them we are nothing [3....... Awesome poem! ! !

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Khalida Bano Ali 09 January 2015

A beautiful and interesting tribute.....................10

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Khalid Saifullah 08 January 2015

What a friendship! What a beautiful story of teasing and pleasing! The poem is simply amazing! Loved reading it! ..........10

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