The Spirit Of Life Comments

Gerry, you might find it helpful to immerse yourself in good contemporary poetry, that is, if you're truly interested in improving as a poet. This poem contains a few good lines, but mostly these life lessons are ineffectual verse because your decision to rhyme forces too many lines into awkwardness (when time grows short to the days that are apart, /they sometimes enjoy a moment solitude of heart.) If you're interested, check out my new website: jeffersoncarterverse.com Tell me how you like it. Yrs, JC