The Spinning Wheel Comments

Thanks to both. Graham I meant the flow to be different at that stage - to kind of mirror the guy's rushing to make up for lost time - but maybe it didn't work! you know fairytales are very de-dum-de-dum and this was it mucking up. Back to the drawing board maybe! The last line annoys me... need to work on that.

I find this very good except for the fourth and fifth stanza's, some how the flow seems to be flawed, you get into rhythm of it and then it stumbles, other then that its very good content and all.

Wow, this has not only just grabbed my heart... the emotions you have put into this poem are great... but also, the way you wrote it... great, amazing! I felt every word! Elya Thorn