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The songs of our heart hear them rise
High in the skies
Like morning doves
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Ever so beautifully sung, lift our hearts to the Lord! .. You know how to sing to the heart, and touch all so deep! .. Thank you ever so much for sharing this! .. :) Dear friend Ever so many 10S! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! +++++ another definitely saved
Thank you for your sweet supportive comments - you keep me lifted up! ! ! !
Hey, Susan! I didn’t remember that I had read and also commented on this. This time around I notice how everything in this poem feels like and articulates uplift. Every stanza causes us to look up. It strikes me that this would make a good plainsong chanted as a morning prayer. Hoping this finds you well in all ways, Glen
Thank you for getting under the hood of this poem and finding aspects that you like! I learn a lot from these kinds of critiques! Thank you for the well wishes, Glen!
Yes, a set of heartening stanzas, successfully balance between the quality of the content and the form.
Thank you, sir, for reading and commenting and giving me valuable information on what you liked about the poem. Tis ver helpful!
Uplifting, perfectly balanced, and the form you chose exemplifies the verse. Contained within these words many hymns of praise.
Hello there, Captain! ! ! I am glad to hear that the Minute Style went well with the substance of the poem. Twas a new style for me and I enjoyed using it
Praising always! ! With the muse of peace and love. Thanks for sharing this poem with us.
Edward, thank you for reading and commenting with your muse on your shoulder! ! !
The praises we give God change us on the inside. The change on the inside reflects on our face. A before and an after praise face in the mirror show a clear starry eyed difference...therapeutic effects of giving praise to the Almighty even as we feel the gnawing shadows of the dark valley all around us. This poem does it yesss. Thank you Susan. I'll keep this one and revisit whenever shadows threaten.10+++👌
Hi Haidee! ! ! I think I will try the mirror when my eyes straighten up! While reading your comment, by the way, I was thinking what a lovely poem you could make out of it! ! ! ! the gnawing shadows whenever shadows threaten- you are naturally poetic! ! Thank you for your enthusiastic response to this piece and those starry-eyed 10's! ! ! ! ! ! ! !
I really loved the simplicity of the piece, and the joy that radiates from it. There's a wonderful sense of peace and 'fun' (not the most eloquent choice of word I guess in a poetry critique, but really great to have some) here. I loved your use of the refrain (kind of) and what it brings to it. Thanks for sharing this ma'am.
Fun? Why not say it is a fun read- it is certainly more communicative than some comments saying what a nice read or I liked it. Fun sounds invigorating, joyful, fresh, a delight. You just say what your heart responds. to a read with! I am fond of refrains but only if they produce the emotional response I am seeking. Thank you, friend Red. Or friend Soul!
i read this one, susan, after your latest posting—a contrast! in your phrase newborn days is a key for me for keeping my spirit lifted. as it happened last night's dreams for me were expressions of frustration and other funky feelings. oh but to wake from such dreams! —to another day we weren't promised. for you the navajo prayer—walk in beauty, beauty before, behind, below you. -glen
Thank you, Glen, for reading so many of my pieces and thank you for acquainting me with the Navajo prayer [ I have never heard that one before- it has a special tenderness to it ] Blessings on you and your day
The joy of beauty, Life and Love Sets this poem far above, And the tonality of faith Surrounds the whole With utmost, grace. A poem reaching, Up on, high Singing feelings, Do not lie. A melodious and unforgettable composition. That goes so well with your artistic disposition!
Sandra! ! ! ! ! ! Yes, yes, yes! ! ! A poem-comment from you certainly perks up my day! ! ! How you can do this amazes me- I would have to work on it for days and days and still it wouldn't sing and chirp as merrily as your comments do! @! ! Thank you, dear friend. I give you a 10+++++++++++! ! ! ! !
The songs of our heart meet our Lord Our sorrow poured His grace received His love perceived.- very fine poem my dear Susan........ when you care for the form of the poem, i feel sometimes that it may affect the flow of the poem that wells up in the heart...... it is simply my thinking and feeling........ very fine poem indeed. thank u. tony
Even though the minute poem has a structure that I needed to bend my verses to fit- -the words came fairly easily and fit together with only a tug here and a tug there- -and they sounded natural instead of stilted and stiff-necked. Perhaps I will try this type of poem again and see if my verses flow again. I think though the message was the flow factor though! ! ! ! Thank you, Tony! ! !
A very heartwarming beautiful poem. So mellifluous.So uplifting. Loved the final stanza. It is the heartbeat of this marvelous piece of work. 10++++and onto my Poem List.
Thank you! ! ! ! I felt that last stanza spoke my heart and hopefully many other hearts as well. Mellifluous! ! ! Isn't that a lovely word- -sets the readers on its wings to soar among the notes of a song! Thank you for the starry eyed 10's! ! ! ! ! And placing it on your fav list- -that is quite an honor! ! !
This is a highly lyrical poem that can be sung with the accompaniment of musical instruments! Let this dewy delight soar up to heavens to freeze into clouds of grace and rain down as the elixir of God's blessings! A poetic delight! Thank you Susan! Top marks!
hi again! ! ! ! I hope this means you read this effort again! ! ! ! But your voice is so sweet and welcome to our ears I don't care if it was just an effort to get the comment posted! ! ! Time after time I don't see my comment posted so I try again and that raises the ire of PH and they yell at me and make me tear up and shiver with fear.... not! ! ! !
A highly lyrical poem that can be sung with the accompaniment of musical instruments lifting one's heart to heavens! This dewy delight will reach up to Heaven and freeze into clouds of grace to rain down in the form of blessings! A poetic delight! A sure 10
I couldn't help but read your lovely, uplifting poem in a sing- song way and can imagine this lovely devotional gem sung with music. Well done for successfully tackling a Traditional Minute poem.10+
Simone, you made me laugh! ! ! Yup, I not only tackled it, I wrestled it to the ground and pinned it there with a head-lock! When I take on a new poem style, I give it everything I got! ! ! Thank you, Simone, for the 10+- -that'll teach that Minute to try to whoop me in a fair fight!
I apologize. I am normally careful about posting my poems free of careless bad grammar and misspelling. My eyes are blurry needing a little lazering and I did not see that the THEM in the title was mistakenly typed THEN.
Part - 2 I love your last four lines that I want to quote here. The songs of our heart meet our Lord Our sorrow poured His grace received His love perceived. A marvelous poem shared incisively.10
Thank you! ! ! ! ! ! I poured my best into those last 4 verses. It just came together so well that I pray that it reaches the souls of the readers. And thank you for the 10, I have a thing for tens! ! ! ! !
Part - 1 I have first time seen your Minute Poem that follows the 8,4,4,4 syllable count structure and usually has 3 stanzas that are exactly the same. It has 12 lines total. and a total of 60 syllables having rhyme scheme as aabb, ccdd, eeff. Though it is difficult to compose yet you have astutely and nicely composed it taking a nice theme.
I am glad it passed the stern requirements for a Minute or Minuet Poem and, glory be, made sense as well! ! ! Thank you for your comment, my friend! ! You always stir us here on PH to do better and better! ! !
Superb- - - -Loved it- - - - - -So lyrical- - -A real song of heart.
Hey, Bharati, I hope your days are sunny without being hot! I am pleased that you liked this- I was hoping it would sound musical as well as have a coherent message.
A beautiful poem! I wonder why you didn’t finish it up as a sonnet (as you always love sonnet) with just addition of a couplet! Many times we just read the poem but never look at the structure, the scheme, the syllable counts and other technical details! It’s in fact very hard composing a structured poem! You have done it…..BRAVO
Oh my word! ! ! Really? ? ? ? ? I didn't know that it would be a sonnet with just adding another couplet! ! ! Oh, dear, and I enjoyed writing this- -does that mean I'll be a sonnet writing fool now? ? ? Oh, dear, oh my! Hahahahahahahahahaha- -and I have several times said I will never write another sonnet! ! ! Thank you for your educational input and encouragement, dear Dr Dillip!
This is so beautifully written Susan as all that I read from you is. I especially like this one as the heart does sing When In Love. Hear the heart and it will rise you to infinite Skies! . As far as the notes yes I think the spelling should have been minuet....
Ah, good! The more I think about it the more I think my source misspelled minuet because this structure sure sounds like it should be- -but what do I know, I was born clumsy! Thank you for your sweet comments- you know how to uplift the spirits of others! !